Classmate Response (Adrian)

Choose a paragraph posted by one of your peers. Then find an example of evidence used in the paragraph and consider it in light of the reading on Using Evidence. What characteristics of weak or strong evidence, or of effective or ineffective quotation do you observe? Please be constructive in your comments, so that if you find areas for improvement, you point them out respectfully and include suggestions for more effective use of evidence.

***The chosen paragraph is below***

Technology has impacted society in many ways; some good, some bad but all life-changing. Positive impacts of technology include improved communication, education, access to information, and mechanized agriculture. However, negative impacts of technology include an increase in unemployment, an increase in mental and health concerns, a rise in pollution, and a rise in cybercrimes. Although technology is widely accepted as a part of our everyday life by society, we need to analyze the pros and cons of the decisions we make online. Criminals are rampant online, as they hide behind anonymity, seldomly discovered by authorities. According to the Aite-Novarica Group, about 47 percent of Americans endured financial identity theft in 2020, a $712.4 billion problem. The fact is, this issue is expensive and shows no signs of slowing down. Cybercrime is here to stay.